tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6085694.post3704880235563976367..comments2023-11-02T21:46:26.482+13:00Comments on Violet goes green, sort of: She looked up to see the man staring at her.Violethttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10547452802344363142noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6085694.post-50451760585445248502007-05-26T12:22:00.000+12:002007-05-26T12:22:00.000+12:00cathi:I should probably ditch that whole line and ...cathi:I should probably ditch that whole line and replace with shorter sentences! It is amazing how a first line can be taken in so many possible directions. Check out nigel patel's efforts, for examplesViolethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10547452802344363142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6085694.post-51776125322423398422007-05-26T11:58:00.000+12:002007-05-26T11:58:00.000+12:00Gosh I am so honoured that you started with mine :...Gosh I am so honoured that you started with mine :) in my head it was in an office, isn't it amazing the different directions you can go in.<BR/><BR/>Keep going, these are great. Seems to be a bit of a pie theme going so far <BR/><BR/>p.s. if you take out the comma like Editter said, you also need to take out the one before "she didn't know"Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6085694.post-75932451454512032822007-05-24T12:33:00.000+12:002007-05-24T12:33:00.000+12:00Oh go on, Nige. You know you want to. If I can p...Oh go on, Nige. You know you want to. If I can post up a half-finished story that's missing whole words and has too many commas, then you can too.<BR/><BR/>the editter: ah, they were supposed to be knee high riding boots.<BR/><BR/>They say that you have to take hundreds of photos to come up with a brilliant one. I guess the same goes with lines in a story...Violethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10547452802344363142noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6085694.post-63840316652781678592007-05-24T08:04:00.000+12:002007-05-24T08:04:00.000+12:00cool! I like the last line ;) must come up with a ...cool! I like the last line ;) must come up with a first one for ya. The possibilities of the knee high she was wearing - was it socks? <BR/><BR/>Oh, and delete the comma after "Whose idea it was"The Editterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16656000178697454370noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6085694.post-69500502577171070162007-05-24T03:57:00.000+12:002007-05-24T03:57:00.000+12:00This IS fun! I'm afraid to try it myself.This IS fun! <BR/>I'm afraid to try it myself.Watson Woodworth https://www.blogger.com/profile/18056045044039701907noreply@blogger.com